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NEW YORK ( TheStreet) -- It was Obama's Jerry Maguire moment for me. He had me at "Good evening." And then he promptly fumbled at the 50.

Let's start with a level set. Compare these two: Bush's 9/11 rubble speech and Obama's "I got 'em!" speech..

Anyone catch the use of pronouns? Bush said, "I hear you!" because the crowd couldn't hear him over the smoldering destruction and ongoing rescue efforts, and then he went on to say that the folks who "did this are going to hear from all of us soon!" It wasn't about him -- at that moment, the common man; it was about us, the country. Our current narcissist in chief couldn't avoid making this historic moment in history about him.

I want to like the guy. I really do. Seems like a nice guy to have a beer with, especially if you're a Cambridge police officer. But seriously, does he take us all to be fools or only a majority of us?

Let's begin:"And so shortly after taking office, I directed Leon Panetta, the director of the CIA, to make the killing or capture of bin Laden the top priority of our war against al Qaeda."

Seriously?

So in Obama's mind, here's what happened at the Pentagon and in Langley the second after he was sworn in:

"Woo hoo! Erase the white boards, gents! Everyone, STOP WHAT THEY'RE DOING. Call the aircraft carriers back to port and land the drones! That 'get bin Laden dead or alive' crap was getting old. Now we can focus on, ummm, let's wait for what the new guy wants to do."

Unless something drastically altered the way the military and our intelligence services operate (something did -- 9/11), using this sentence in his speech was a mistake at best and thoughtless at worst.

"Today, at my direction, the United States launched a targeted operation against that compound in Abbottabad, Pakistan. A small team of Americans carried out the operation with extraordinary courage and capability."

As someone who gave 15 years of his life to this now "non-war" on "not terror," I want to say "seriously" again, but I already used it above. Obama's use of "Today, at my direction" was a subtlety lost on many but not all of us. There are some things we, common folks, know and take as a given. For a man whose reputation is rapidly becoming one of self-absorption, why were these four words added? Fire your speech writers. Reread that sentence without those four words and tell me if it makes a difference to you.

I was hoping that he'd give a shout out to President Bush -- that would've been the classy thing to do -- and in my mind would've erased these two fumbles. It was reported that the intel for this operation came from Gitmo and the "enhanced interrogation techniques," such as water boarding, that Bush put in place and Obama campaigned hard against and excoriated Bush for.

But it was not to be.

The only reference to Bush? " We must also reaffirm that the United States is not -- and never will be -- at war with Islam. I've made clear, just as President Bush did shortly after 9/11, that our war is not against Islam." Our "war" (glad he's maybe calling this a "war on terror again") may not be against Islam, but radical Islam is certainly at war against us. The folks in the Pentagon and Langley do think this, as do many Americans.

Firing line: This is a victory for the U.S. and the victims of the 9/11 attacks, and it is certainly greater than one man. It's about the U.S. and the brave men and women in our military and intelligence services who do their mission without self-aggrandizement. It would be nice if their skipper followed their example.

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